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Well-written. Good job. 写得很不错, 选择部分原文做了修改, 供参考。
life (Life) will always go on
Forest Gump is one of my favorite movie(s). One Scene of the movie often comes to my mind recently. (改: I have been reflecting on one specific scene from the movie recently.)
After Forest Gump had made (achieved) great success in his fishing business, he received a (piece of) bad news one day: his mother was dieing (dying). Nothing could prevent the death (Her illness was terminal). What Forest could do was to accompany （或者be with）his mother during the last few days (during the final days) of her life.
He was (加上already) a very rich man at the time. It did not make any sense to make (much去掉）more money -- so he quit his business, entrusted (entrusting) it to his friend and became a happy gardener in his hometown, led a life like a recluse (leading a recluse's life). (上面这句话写得很好，但是太长) Jenny -- the woman Forest (had) loved deeply all his life -- came back to Forest after a long and desperate journey. (去掉They stayed together）Forest was pleased with her return, strongly hoped （hoping） that she would stay with him and expected a family life. (and start a family together.)
But Jenny was not such kind of woman. When Forest got up in the morning one day, he found Jenny had left (不要the town) and began her venture again. He sat stiffly (mindlessly) on the bench in front of his house. Both Mother and Jenny had gone, where would he go next....He felt lost...
Then, he stood up and started running. He run (ran) to the end of the road, then (不要 run) to the end (of) the town, across the state of Alabama, then run to (finally arriving at) the ocean. There he decided he should turn around and keep on running to another ocean….
He'd (had) kept running for over 3 years. In the process, he made a name for himself. Everybody got to know him and was curious about the reason of (behind) his running, but he just run (kept running) for no reason.....
Here is what I appreciate the film the most (what I appreciate most about the movie): life is full of uncertainties, and (even miseries). The departure of the (one's) beloved ones, the broken (breaking-up) of a relationship, the conflicts between people and people (among people, etc.) All (these will) leave one in (去掉the state of）dismay, bewilderment, (and) diffidence …. And you find you do not have (cannot summon) all the strength which you hope you (加would) have. There are weaknesses in your character (our human nature) which we can hardly change. Things do not (always) go (加 the way) you wish it would go.
这一段你自己改改：Faced with all these miseries and failures, however, you should not fall down. On most occasions, nothing can help you. The only thing you can do is to keep running -- running forward. Although You don’t know if there are good things or bad things waiting for you in the distance, even don’t know exactly which direction you should run towards, whatever…you have to keep going. One can not afford much time to soak oneself in misery and halt one's life.
Put all the unfortunate past （misfortune） behind you, and set out for a new journey.
No matter what happens, life will always go on.
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We have to say that you did a good job writing this diary. We can tell you have extensive vocabularies. Please pay more attention to simple grammatical uses and your writing will improve greatly.
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2007-04-12 17:08:17
